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Around about a week ago, as I beat my head against the dreaded writer's block, I was searching for, believe it or not, a little exercise. I needed to set aside for a while the rigid rules and convoluted canon of my own universe, and take a walk in another.
Enter
Zentio, who was kind enough to lend me his adorable character to take for a spin. He gave me some references to how he looked, told me what kind of character he was, and informed me of the job he loved to do. With those basic bits in mind, I had free reign to flesh out the rest of him.
I put finger to keyboard, and the story that flowed from there became one of dreams, ambition, and one apprentice magician's hunger to be a big star.
Will he succeed? What is a squossom? Where are his pants? Read on, and find out!
Zentio Cootmin belongs to Zentio
Summer Fields is my own.
Enter
Zentio, who was kind enough to lend me his adorable character to take for a spin. He gave me some references to how he looked, told me what kind of character he was, and informed me of the job he loved to do. With those basic bits in mind, I had free reign to flesh out the rest of him.I put finger to keyboard, and the story that flowed from there became one of dreams, ambition, and one apprentice magician's hunger to be a big star.
Will he succeed? What is a squossom? Where are his pants? Read on, and find out!
Zentio Cootmin belongs to
ZentioSummer Fields is my own.
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Thank you so much once again, this was very nice to read (still reading but almost done as of this post) and very captivating *hug*
You're very welcome, of course. I had a lot of fun doing it, and I'm glad it was up to snuff. *hug*
I'm glad I seem to have a way with food in these stories; that is something I somewhat struggle with, so that it is enough to cause empathy drooling is great to hear.
SPOILERS!! READ THE DAMN STORY PEOPLE! IT'S AWESOME!
the sudden change in personality of Summer. She seems like such a sweet and endearing gal for the first two-thirds, and then it's suddenly like she was replaced with Misery Creepy Stalker Squossum! A bit jarring. Sure, maybe she was puttin' on a front the whole time, but I thought it was a case of a more innocent fascination in gettin' Zen to enjoy bein' bigger, since there didn't seem t' be any indication her purpose was more malicious. Ah well! Lookin' forward to more stuff from you!
But, as
I do agree that I should try more foreshadowing. Such a technique, though, would require foresight, a skill I ittedly lack in amounts most dire. In a world such as the one in this story, which I perhaps painted with a brush yet too grim, it may be achieved as simply as a villainous monologue or aside. Just because I am unaccustomed to such... levity should be no reason for me not to one day attempt it.
Thank you much for reading the story, and I'm glad you largely enjoyed it! Thank you, as well, for the thoughtful comment - it is pleasing to receive them, whatever the nature. Editing oneself is indeed hard to do.